A narrator who lies badly is a magic trick with the wire showing. The reader spots the cheat by chapter three and spends the rest of the book ahead of you. The mistake is overplaying the hand. Contradictions on page 4, hedges that flag themselves, memories narrated a little too neatly. The unreliable narrators who…
Most writers dress their characters like they’re flipping through a department store catalog. Jeans and a t-shirt, or maybe a dark suit. It’s a missed opportunity. What a character wears shouldn’t just keep them warm; it should reveal their class, their anxieties, or their lies. Think of Jonathan Kellerman’s Alex Delaware novels. Kellerman is a…
Chekhov said if you hang a gun on the wall in chapter one, it had better fire by chapter three. Fair enough. But most novels don’t run on guns. They run on smaller things: a borrowed sweater, a chipped mug, a voicemail nobody deleted. The principle still applies. If an object matters in your ending,…
Most scenes start thirty seconds too early. The phone rings. Your character answers. Hello? Hi, it’s me. How are you? Fine, you? The reader is already skimming. All of that is staging. Greetings, arrivals, weather, who’s sitting where. It’s you clearing your throat on the page before you say the thing you actually sat down…
Monotone prose comes from sentences that are all the same length. Every one of them can be clean, correct, even pretty. Line them up at fourteen words each, or four words each, and the page hums at a single frequency. Readers experience that hum as boredom, and they blame the story. Rhythm is invisible when…
Marcia and Maggie. Brynn and Lynn. Every novel has a pair of names the reader keeps swapping, and the writer never notices, because from inside the story each one feels distinct. A name does three jobs at once. It pins an era (Gertrude, Madison and Ainsley were born in different decades). It hints at class…
Writers love to delay. Not on purpose. We delay by giving our characters things to do. The scene seems fine on the page. The phone rings, a visitor arrives, everyone’s busy. But nothing pushes toward a decision. These characters could have the same conversation tomorrow. Or next week. Here’s the tell. If the events of…
Somewhere in your draft is an object the whole plot depends on, and right now it’s wearing a spotlight. Readers resent clues that are truly hidden. They feel cheated when the reveal depends on information they never had a fair chance to see. Good mysteries put the clue in plain sight and count on the…
Most non-fiction drafts read like reports. Weeks compress into paragraphs. Months into sentences. Everything flows in a smooth current of information. Nothing is ever in a room. Fifty years ago, Tracy Kidder figured out something every narrative writer should steal. He writes scenes. In The Soul of a New Machine, he could have told you…
Most novels pick a tense and stick with it. Smart move. But some of the best fiction in print shifts tense on purpose, and when it works, you barely notice. Scott Turow’s Presumed Innocent opens in present tense for a courtroom scene, then drops into past for everything leading up to the trial. The shift…
Your protagonist is thinking. How do you show it? Three approaches exist, and most manuscripts mix them up without knowing the trade-offs. Quotation marks: “I can’t believe she said that.” The old-school method. Readers confuse thoughts with spoken dialogue, so you add “she thought” tags to disambiguate. Belt and suspenders. It slows prose down. Italics…
Two punctuation marks. Same real estate at the end of a dialogue line. Opposite effects. “You don’t understand, I never meant to—” That em dash is a door slamming. The speaker got cut off. Maybe someone interrupted. Maybe the thought collided with something louder. Either way, the sentence didn’t end. It was killed mid-breath. The…
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